I have been working on making my writing more interesting for my readers. I have added similes, talking, interesting words and my thoughts and feelings.
Vj I loved your story I liked the way you described how you cheered like a lion and your mum cheered loud like a horn, when your team scored a try. I can see you used your punctuation well also by using capital letters, full stops, exclamation marks and speech marks. Well doneð
Hi VJ, Your story is amazing. I loved how you had alot of ideas in your story and how you used who, what, when, who and why. I also loved the organisation of your story and the vocabulary that you used. Win or lose, you are a winner, just for participating.
Vj I loved your story I liked the way you described how you cheered like a lion and your mum cheered loud like a horn, when your team scored a try. I can see you used your punctuation well also by using capital letters, full stops, exclamation marks and speech marks.
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Hi VJ, Your story is amazing. I loved how you had alot of ideas in your story and how you used who, what, when, who and why. I also loved the organisation of your story and the vocabulary that you used. Win or lose, you are a winner, just for participating.
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